I'm working on The Silent Runis of Earth at the moment (aka the "incomplete plug"). A lot of what I'm doing is mission descs, and I was getting into it a little bit. Anyway, I was getting to the point where it almost became novel-like writing, and I'm wondering if this is too excessive for EVO. Here's a sample from the first mission for the Pleiades Union:
_This bar isn't much different that most of the others in this sector: the whole place reeks of the desperation and hopelesness that seems to have swallowed everything here. Over in the corner, there are a few Union officers arguing. They walk over and sit at the table next to you. As you slowly finish your drink, you can't help but overhear some shreads of thier conversation. "...it was pitiful... ...destroyed. Every single one... ...proably 150 taken... ...escaped... ...no patrols... ...police still trying..." One of them looks at you. His face had been worn by the stress and hopelesness of his job, and he appears to be much older than he could be. You then realize how much you must stand out here. Everyone here is like that. Except for the pirates and slavers, with that unmistakable sparkle in thier eyes one only gets when he knows that there's little the people here can do to stop him. The only people who look decent and yet young and viligant are travelers like you, who are becoming increasingly rare in these parts.
From the look in the officers eyes, you can tell he desperatly wants you to help him. He doesn't even have to say anything. Do you approach him?_
I think this is good, and it sets the right feel for this region of space (which I'm not sure I could do as well in a shorter Desc), but is this too much for EVO?
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Cuz I'm a 21st Century Digital Boy
I don't know the Monty Python but I've got a lotta toys
My daddy is a Renegade, his name is Hellcat Helian
Wait a second...