Mmm, I like it! Good detail...you made it easy to envision the surroundings and feelings. (and you didn't require hardly any editing...I love it when that happens! :)).

Anyways, I definitely encourage everyone to (url="http://"http://www.AmbrosiaSW.com/cgi-bin/ubb/forumdisplay.cgi?action=topics&number;=49")check it out(/url)!

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Hmmm.... a good story, actually. Quite well written, some nice plot elements. If you're reading this, Kagi, I've posted a commentary in the story thread, if you'd like to read it.

Well done! Hope you post the rest of the story, Kagi, looks like an interesting one.

-Andiyar

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Thanks for the great comments and the kind words! I will endeavor to do better and there is actually quite a bit more of the story written.

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**Thanks for the great comments and the kind words!:) I will endeavor to do better and there is actually quite a bit more of the story written.

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You're quite welcome, Kagi! As the (unofficial) critic of the Chronicles board, I'm making it my goal to post on every story submitted (well, most of the recent ones ;)) and I must say that it's a great deal of fun! Keep writing everybody! I'm looking forward to reading each and every one of your stories, and maybe even playing all of your games!

-Andiyar

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