This week's Chronicles comes to us from spitfire.

You can get this Chronicle (url="http://"http://www.AmbrosiaSW.com/cgi-bin/ubb/forumdisplay.cgi?action=topics&number;=49&SUBMIT;=Go")here(/url).

As for my comments -- I enjoyed it, but it's not smooth...try to make the words flow, as well as the timeline. I like the contents, but make everything more descriptive and more flowing.

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Originally posted by theGlueBubble:
**As for my comments -- I enjoyed it, but it's not smooth...try to make the words flow, as well as the timeline. I like the contents, but make everything more descriptive and more flowing.

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I agree completely, it's a bit rough but the story is very interresting. It just needed some proof reading and drafting that's all. I found it to be a very beckoning plot. It makes you want to know more. It leaves you at the climax of the introduction, so you can't wait to know what's about to happen.

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Just out of curiosity.... how many stories are actually in the Chronicles queue at any given time?

Just interested...

-Andiyar

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"Any good that I may do here, let me do now, for I may not pass this way again"

::checks date when the last was submitted:: 9/7
::checks date of his submission:: 9/9
WOOT!

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We tell stories of heroes to remind ourselves that we too can be great.

(quote)Originally posted by Tarnćlion Andiyarus:
**Just out of curiosity.... how many stories are actually in the Chronicles queue at any given time?

Just interested... ...so everyone, start writing!

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Fortress of Die Nacht: An upcoming game from Aviary Productions.
(url="http://"http://www.aviaryproductions.f2s.com/downloads.html")Go take a look!(/url)
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Originally posted by Celchu:
**::checks date when the last was submitted:: 9/7
::checks date of his submission:: 9/9
WOOT!

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Indeed, yours is next in the queue.

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Fortress of Die Nacht: An upcoming game from Aviary Productions.
(url="http://"http://www.aviaryproductions.f2s.com/downloads.html")Go take a look!(/url)

(quote)Originally posted by theGlueBubble:
**Right now there are 5 -- it's been staying about that level, but it is ever slowly increasing. I hope we rival the EV and EVO Chronicles one day.;)

Once my next one comes online (figure a couple of weeks) I'll upload some more of my story. If all goes well, I think for the one story I will have 9 or 10 submissions!

Oh, and how many submissions do the EV/EVO chronicles get?
:::starts up word processor, muttering numerous vague sounding ideas:::

-Andiyar

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"Any good that I may do here, let me do now, for I may not pass this way again"
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Written by the gluebubble:
Right now there are 5 -- it's been staying about that level, but it is ever slowly increasing. I hope we rival the EV and EVO Chronicles one day. ...so everyone, start writing!

I've got 2 comin soon.

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