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    • EV/EVO Chronicles: "Endings"-A short story


      (Posted on 03-27-2001)

      This is actually an English assignment that I did (A+, hooray!). It takes place in the EVO universe and a part of an addition plug. This plug is not yet released, though, and is not due for a while.

      “Endings”

      Their shuttle touched down quietly amid the lush foliage of Xeck. The man stepped out and tested the ground for firmness, then he nodded and returned to the ship. Momentarily the man reappeared accompanied by the attractive young woman. They carried an ancient water craft out and set it on the ground. Both froze as a patrolling gunboat passed overhead, but it didn’t see them or their ship nestled among the trees.

      Safe...for now.

      The man retrieved an armful of equipment from the ship. They loaded the water craft and pushed it toward a nearby body of water. At the bank of the river, they stopped and gaped in awe at the beauty of a perfectly clear stream. The man thought back to earth where he had been born. He hadn’t seen such a perfect sight since he was a child.

      In a moment he resumed his look of authority as he remembered he was on an important mission and there was no time to reminisce. Sliding the canoe into the river, they leapt in and began to set up the equipment. They were careful to be quiet, as there were patrols everywhere on this world. Their small craft slid smoothly through the water, and every aspect of the scene seemed to contribute to its serenity.

      Suddenly they snapped alert to a tone emitted by one of their sensors. They had been found. In a few moments a gunboat would arrive and destroy them. The two people just looked at each other, deep in thought, wondering what death would be like. Then, just as the roar of approaching engines could be heard, they both simultaneously emitted a single word: ”Goodbye.”

      THE END

      (This message has been edited by moderator (edited 03-27-2001).)

    • Pretty nice, good in all its shortness. I like the drastic ending, although it is a bit cheesy. Whatever. Still fun to read.

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    • I like it. A bit short, but still good. Maybe you could make a pre-quel to this. Sort of explain the charecters more. I'd read it. 🙂

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    • Your story is nice in its purity. You don't waste space with things which aren't necessary to the plot, and you manage to quickly create a mood. I like it.

      Paradigm

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    • way too short

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